Thursday, November 26, 2009

Please rate my song lyrics?

This one of my first attempt at lyrics writting, so please don't be too harsh when you rate.



Constructive criticism would be helpful as well.



My friends find it corny, you'll probably find it dull, but your comments can help me fix it and write more! Thank you and enjoy:



WHAT WE PULLED



You were fallen, I pulled you back up



You pulled me in with your smile of luck



You pushed me away from your heart



Warned me you were pulling my leg



Tonight will be the last of its kind



I held on while you pulled your shirt off,



I hung on, while you pulled at my hair,



To a dream you had pushed out of my mind



Pulling up my pants did I realize?



Tonight will be the last of its kind



I had let you pull at my heartstrings



Pull my phantom soul to pieces



Once more you were pushing me astray



Did you expect me to pull through?



Tonight will be the last of its kind



You pulled the plug of my heart, of my life



As if you had pulled off a big deal



Could I have pushed your memory away



Please rate my song lyrics?

Ignore your stupid friends, I'm not a critic but i can tell you it was excellent, i think it could be turned into a GREAT rock song.



Don't stop writing songs, keep 'em comin' bro!!



Please rate my song lyrics?

OMg,that's pretty cool! I give a 7(1 out of10).

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